Tuesday, November 17, 2020

My Writing

 Hello!

I want to show you my writing I completed today. I started it yesterday, but then I finished it off today. It's called: Waking the Giant. 

Here it is:

The ground shook, the  birds began to panic. Trees were beginning  to fall. At first, there was silence, but, a few moments later, the ground began to shake again. People started to run, birds kept panicking, but there was no use, the rumbling sound kept on going.
A few minutes later, the shaking stopped, and people had locked themselves in their houses. It was just like an earthquake, people hiding underneath tables and their beds. Nobody knew what to do. 

People knew that something woke the creature. The creature had big eyes, a humongous body. A person walked up to their window, and saw that the grass was just like his blanket. So that meant humans had been stepping on his blanket. What if that made him wake up? What if he didn’t want people stepping on the grass? 

The boy told his mum to tell scientists about his idea. He wanted to know if his thinking was correct. The boy was desperate to find out, but he just had to wait. His mum agreed, but she had to find a way to get to the lab without the giant seeing her. 
This was a big rusk, but she knew that she had to do it. She slowly opened the door, and took slow steps, she knew if the giant saw her, it would be a big problem. As soon as she got to the lab, she needed to find a scientist, 

“I have a few questions to ask you,” the mum said. 
“About the giant?” Asked one of the scientists. “Yes about that, so, what made the giant wake up?” The mum replied. “Well, it shows that the giant woke up because it actually needed to eat,” the scientist replied back.
“Wow”, said the mum, “I cannot believe this”. She raced back to her house, but as soon as she got there, the giant was gone. “Oh no! The giant has gone out of sight, what do I do?” she said. She went into her house and explained everything to her son. 

“So I was wrong?” asked the boy. “Yes,” the mum said back. “But where is it?” the boy said. “I don’t know, it’s gone out of everyone’s sight” the mum said. “Oh” the boy said, sadly. A few days passed, and nothing had changed, the giant had gone! Everyone was happy about this, and then everyone returned to their jobs.

So, that's my writing, I hope you liked it!!

7 comments:

  1. Hi Mahrosh. Really nice writing mahrosh.

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    1. Hi Aarna,
      Thanks for your comment. You have forgot to put the letter M as a capital because it's my name. Anyway, thanks for commenting!!

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  3. Kia Ora Mahrosh I really liked how you put the writing in paragraphs and how you explained. Did you write that in one day? Did your hands hurt? Maybe next time you could add punctuation like commas and speech marks.

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    1. Hey Nasteho,
      Thanks for commenting! As it says, I did it in 2 days. My hands didn't really hurt, I did it slowly, like, a sentence at a time. My story was about the giant, and it did have lot's of speaking, more commas would be nice.

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  4. Kia ora Mahrosh i like your writing maby you can tell how hard was it? or easy? by the way you can make anthor one? that's easier to read?

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    1. Hi Pranav,
      Thanks for commenting! Remember to check your comment before you publish it. It was not that hard, but also not quite easy. Yes, I can make another one. It might be like this one, but yeah.

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